All thoughts extinguished as the searing fire engulfed his body and mind. He hadn't even a chance to glimpse it before it wrapped its sweltering arms around him. In seconds, his once smooth skin ignited, blistered and cracked, flaking off into the night air. Tissue and organs set alight, no feelings in his bones but overwhelming agony.
He let out a howl of anguish as his exposed muscles convulsed, burned and shriveled. His stomach burst, allowing the boiling acids to flow from within. The blaze tore through his flesh, crumbling his inner workings, leaving him hollow and empty. His still sizzling blood dripped onto the ground, forming a small puddle of steaming red fluid.
His lifeless form toppled to the scorched earth; his face rested onto the blackened grass. His soul had departed from its mortal body. The pain was over; it would bother him no longer.
Kind sir you are much higher than a grade C kind regards, thanks to you caller
ReplyDeleteHa ha! This is fantastic (for a C grade chap like yourself). I love the imagery adn the language Rob it's great. It carries that observant, yet grotesque scientific edge well. the use of 'flaking' is super, 'inner workings' sounds brilliantly Victorian. The personification of the arms wrapping around him is also great. Correct use of semi-colon in the first instance, but check the second...is the second clause a main clause?
ReplyDeleteAnd just to clarify - this is certainly not C grade work!