It was only a matter of time before the heat enticed weaponry had chosen its next victim. It just happened to be a nearby citizen. One strike from the extra-terrestrial device was enough to destroy him.
What seemed like deep crimson paint splatters cascaded their way down to the broken cement. His skin began to split across his torso and spread down to his charred feet, destroying each and every cell inside of his broken shell of a body. The sickening crunch of his veins splitting open was almost too overwhelming. The lost blood painfully oozed out of his neck and travelled down his irreparable body; his organs seemed to give up and decay within a matter of seconds. His punctured chest ejected all the sizzling blood it could muster. The sound of bones crumbling and incinerating into nothing couldn't help but sink into my ears. It seemed like his whole body had been obliterated into small discarded pieces, leaving nothing but reddened ashes and the smell of burning.
Well done Rach, glad to see this up here. Now, are you sure about 'enticed'? Check its meaning.
ReplyDeleteI love the use of sound imagery - are you sure about the veins crunching, they're not like bones and quite squishy.
Good use of semi-colon.
I love, love, love 'reddened ashes'. What a fantastic image, although obviously horrible considering they are the remains of a body. Well done really good use of vocabulary. I prefer the second paragraph to the second - I wonder if you would look at the first to improve it!